I only do spongebob ones so this COULD suck.

DIAGLA'S EVIL PLOT

Palkia: Diagla, will you think of a plan already?
Diagla: For the 333,444,354th time NO!
It shows the earth.
Brock: Ash, Why should we go to battle Articuno? Just so we can capture Zapdos?
May: Zapdos?
Back In Space...
Diagla: I heard there was a human. One called 'Ash'.
Palkia: Whats your point?
Diagla: We can ***** *** ** *****!

What will hapen? Find out in Zapdos saves the day!

The ***** *** ** ***** is secret!

ZAPDOS SAVES THE DAY!

P: What did you say?
D: I said ***** *** ** *****!
P: Uhhhhh...
D: JUST COME WITH ME!
They go to a control room.
D: See that button Palkia? Press it.
P presses a button. It gets a ballon... TEAM ROCKET!
D: Doh'!
P: You Watch the simpsons?
D: Yes.
Team Rocket Does the team song.
Jessie: We were going to catch pikachu but you lot went and got us into this mess!
Meowth: Their pokemon! This could be a rare catch!
D: NO!
D stomps and the floor cracks.
James: Just as we were-
M covers his mouth.
M: Jess already said that!
D: NOW! PALKIA! PRESS IT!
They again take a wrong time and absorb Zapdos.
Z: <Stop.>
D: You and-
Z zaps Diagla and Palkia. He sends himself to earth with team rocket.

next, The Fight begins. Who will win?

Well, it's creative, I guess..

WTF?!! *w* Ok.... That wasn't even creative. That was a load of spam & crap! Plus you didn't need to double post there's an edit button you know.

Well, on the Spongebuddy mania forums it isn't! And thats the way I post fics!

THE FIGHT BEGINS!

P, Not Knowing where he was going, Tripped.
P: Owwwwwwwwwww.
D1 (Diagla) rams the button getting A, Mx, Ma, B, TR, Z, Pikachu and a gengar get took on the ship.
D1: Not just humans, Pokemon from earth too!
Deoxys hovers down.
D2: Stop capturing humans and Pokemon.
D2 Blasts them with energy. D1 Rams D2 farther.

I'm pretty sure that you're allowed to double post if you're putting up a new chapter/part of a story/something.

On this forum, it's allowed to double-post if you are updating an art or writing thread and there are no new replies. Otherwise, though, you need to follow the rules of this forum when you post here.

Be that as it may, I'm not sure this really qualifies as a fic. It's just a random, peculiar, spontaneous dialogue, with no effort to develop characters or any hinting at a structured plot. And seriously, you could at least take the effort to type out the names. You have no idea how foolish you sound when you refer to characters by the first letters of their names. Nobody besides you can tell what's going on.

Furthermore, your chapters are bizarrely short. The latest entry isn't even as long as a good, content-filled post that isn't writing, let alone a chapter. Although I'm praying these installments aren't called chapters.

Well, then. This isn't the Spongebuddy mania forums, last time I checked, anyway. <.< You joined the EVForums, unless my eyes are REALLY hating the URL up there.
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At LEAST write out they're dang names... Seriously, D1 and D2? When I was reading I was like "What the heck? Who's D1 and D2?" I didn't understand it at first... ._.

This is even smaller then mine when I first started. (and mine sucked...) And it's not creative, either. I don't even understand the plot, barely. *.*

What the heck? Why the heck would you put THAT in there. That's not creative at all. <.<

....I don't get it. o.o

Well, keeping to the topic, if I were in command of Zapdos, I would TOTALLY pwn Dialga. My love for flying lets me perform advanced manoeuvres! =D

Okay. Although I've stayed out of this for a while, there is something I need to say:

Script format is a way to write fanfiction, although not a common way. TCoD says that script format should be saved for fanfics that are like TV shows or movies or something. However, I've seen some that are not like that, but they're meant to be funny and not epic stories. They usually have no structured plot and not very good character development, but this is usually on purpose and it's funny so no one cares.

(at least that's what I think. I could be wrong)

My point is, this is a fanfic. I'm not sure if it's meant to be funny or not, I'm just assuming it is because of that weird Simpsons thing. If it isn't, then you're using the wrong format.

Although it could use a lot of work. It's really not good to simply block up a sentance just because it's secret. If it's that secret, don't even say it. Work around it. Somehow. And write out names, dangit!

I also think it moves much too fast and I can't understand what's going on. And please describe the setting. PLEASE.

Diagla and Palkia are on a ship. They kept on trying to get Ash and Pals but failed every time. The finally got them excepted they absorbed a gengar, Team rocket and Zapdos. Diagla is currently fighting Deoxys at the engines.

You need to learn the 8 rules of the Dicta Boelcke Flying Manual. >.>

Necesitas aprender hablar ingles. -_-

Sorry, buddy, but as plots go, this isn't. As fics go, this isn't. Script and screenplay formats may be a sort of fic, Cynda, but this is missing so many other crucial points that this doesn't qualify as a fic anyway.

ZapdosWins, please learn to take criticism.

Anniku, you may not know this, but that's inadvertently flaming him, which is not okay. Instead of repeating exactly what I said and then adding, "This is worse than my fic, which sucked" point out something else wrong with it.

The most basic thing IMO is sentence structure. Describe everything in detail. Use adjectives and adverbs:

Arrow flew.

Arrow flew rapidly.

Arrow flew rapidly, cutting the air in two.

Arrow flew like a bullet, expertly slicing the sky apart with speed as he plummeted towards the earth from thirty metres from the air, talons flashing like golden daggers at his target.

Some things are just really crazy, which I hate. Unless it's meant to be funny, this seems more epic then funny...

HMM... I can't think of anything anybody hasn't already said. >.o" All I can say is be more descriptive about the surroundings and the battle and the pokemon. (I'm sure theres someone who doesn't know these things... Even though I do doubt they're here.)

You're doing better, though. Writing the names and being a little more descriptive, also using the correct format. ^-^
*cough claps cough*